Sadie Jay

So, this is Chapter One of Like Cracks in the Sidewalk . That's still a working title, which may be changed at a later date. This the very first, very rough draft. 20 edits, or more, to follow I'm sure! The original premise was a bit dark, and maybe because I decided on first person and I've never written first, it's not starting so dark. Yet. Hopefully, it'll go the way I have it plotted. Things change so easily, the characters are always whispering in my ears, and things happen that I wasn't expecting. So, anyway, for anyone interested in Beta reading, I present Chapter 1!  Chapter 1.1 I turned my head slowly to peer over my shoulder when someone pressed up against my back. My long torso was stooped sideways against the bar with my feet crossed and my upper half balanced on my elbow as I visited with Molly, but I straightened when I noticed who was nudging into my hip. Molly might have been my best friend since our UT of Austin years, but she was the n

So, I've started my next book (working title "Cracks in the Sidewalk") and I'm very undecided about which direction to take. So I'm asking  for opinions. I've never written anything in 1st person, not sure how comfortable I am with it, but I'm thinking about trying it with this one. So, basically, I've written the first couple of pages in both 1st and 3rd person. This is a first draft, so verrrrryyyy crude. I'm not asking for edits, just opinions. Let me know in the comments whether you prefer the first one or the second one...or just scrap the whole thing and start over! 1st Person I turned my head slowly to peer over my shoulder where a body had pressed up against my back. I was stooped sideways against the bar with my feet crossed and my upper body balanced on my elbow where it rested on the wood top as I visited with my companion, Molly, but I straightened when I noticed the shorter man who was nudging into my hip. Molly might have been my