Headphones was an experiment, a story written in "snapshots", a serial, a comic in word form-- call it what you will. It ran for one year plus one day-- January 1st of 2015 to January 1st of 2016. It was the story of a group of friends who took in a damaged girl and helped her find herself. But on the way, she helped them fill the holes in their own lives. I've pulled it now with the hopes of rewriting it into a book. Each day was matched with a music video and each month's mixes are still here. So if you've stumbled in, enjoy the music, and hopefully I'll be able to post updates occasionally!

Saturday, April 15, 2017

CampNaNo Halfway Mark: Embers and Flame

So here's the thing:

I've pushed and pulled and got Embers and Flame through Chapter 5, and I'm still really undecided if there is any chemistry between Ben and Cherry. I set a "goal" or a challenge to each story I write, and this one is supposed to be something light-- a rainy afternoon, don't really have to think too hard, kind of read. Give it a perusal if you're at all interested, but remember, it's a very rough first draft.

Something I want to mention is Ryan. Just so you know, he really is a decent guy and he did care for Cherry. They just simply weren't all that compatible--there was a lack of chemistry (yes, I love that word, just in case you were wondering about it). Cherry has a problem with self-esteem and he tends to blame himself for the breakup-- he dwells too much on the failure of the relationship. It's all still fresh enough that he tends to compare everything to Ryan, and it becomes a problem later in his relationship with Ben. So, the question at this point becomes, as I try to lay the groundwork for that conflict, is it coming through? Or is it just the opposite, and is becoming annoying? Let me know in the comments, please. Also, is the pace too slow? Too much narrative? And, obviously, is there any chemistry between Ben and Cherry?

*note: I've pulled the first 5 chapters. But if you are interested in being a Beta reader, contact me through the comments.

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